Kacie Whaley: Like, How Very
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This is the poem we workshopped in class and time ran short, so we weren't able to give it as much time as we did the other poems. (I'm so sorry, Kacie!) This is a wonderful poem. One of the things that struck me immediately is how compulsively readable it is and what a conversational vibe it has. It just snaps through from line to line with a natural ease that is very effective and a joy to read. I loved how it feels exactly like the era in which it is set; it's a very good expression of a very specific time and place. Another thing that is done very well is the character's voice and the personalities of all of the subjects. It really feels like we're right there with them, listening and resopnding and becoming a part of this story. It leaves me wanting to read more and more. What could perhaps be edited is the last few lines. The abruptness works through the poem but there at the end, it ends on several abstract images that doesn't give the same living, breathing feel as the rest of it. I don't think these two lines need to be expanded in length, just edited with a different phrase that offers more specific imagery. Great job!
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